New Original - "Alright"

[CapM]

Here's a song I wrote last year and finally decided to get it recorded.  This is a first for me in that I'm using my new instrument (keys)!  Anyhow, I just recorded the vocal and guitar his morning before work.  I may re-do a couple of things this weekend (for instance, vocal may be a tad loud?), but I thought I'd post here for feedback purposes.  Any and all comments welcomed!  Thanks.

 

 

 

Alright

In the dark I feel the weight of night

With heightened senses of the things to come

In the dark is where shadows hide

To be revealed when the night is done

 

Chorus:

It's always darkest just before the light

But in the morning it'll be alright

Alright

 

In the dark I see unfamiliar memories

In the shape of things that used to be

In the dark I search for distant melodies

Between the muffled voices and the humming of machine

 

Chorus

 

Now in this place that I've always been

I see stars above I've never seen

The light they give may light my way

But they don't give the clarity of day

 

In the dark I feel weary

As I prepare my bed to lay upon

In the dark I close my eyes

And start dream about the new day’s dawn

 

Chorus

[Blue Dog]

That's really good CapM . Keep up the great work. Blue Dog

[Oldjock]

Loved it.

Henk

[DianeB]

Darin, that's impressive on all counts: melody, lyrics, guitar, vocal articulation, and the entry of the keyboards. I liked the stronger "Alright" in the later choruses, and the bridge is just right. The only weak spot I heard was the final "Alright" where there's a brief, awkward silence between the last guitar note and the final keyboard chord. But, wow, you're hitting on all cylinders these days. ?

[Nutty1]

This is excellent CapM, the blend of instruments is superb making a great sound. I really love the lyrics and your singing is top notch as always. The slow down at the end did fell like it was creating some uncertainty as if you were trying to convince us that it will be alright.

Another professional production from you, great stuff!

[IanD]

Cap, I love this one!

I really like the beautiful simplicity of the piece. Dare I say that the vocal line feels a little more melodic than usual and this is a really attractive aspect of the song. I love the way you introduce the keys and, again, their subtle beautiful simplicity. 

They do say that sometimes "less is more" and I think you really proved it with this piece... superb!

Ian

[CapM]

On 8/15/2018 at 12:34 AM, DianeB said:

Darin, that's impressive on all counts: melody, lyrics, guitar, vocal articulation, and the entry of the keyboards. I liked the stronger "Alright" in the later choruses, and the bridge is just right. The only weak spot I heard was the final "Alright" where there's a brief, awkward silence between the last guitar note and the final keyboard chord. But, wow, you're hitting on all cylinders these days. ?

 

On 8/15/2018 at 3:08 AM, Nutty1 said:

This is excellent CapM, the blend of instruments is superb making a great sound. I really love the lyrics and your singing is top notch as always. The slow down at the end did fell like it was creating some uncertainty as if you were trying to convince us that it will be alright.

Another professional production from you, great stuff!

Okay, I changed the way I sung that last line.  I still wanted to end on the strings though - the way they fade out I thought sounded cool.

On 8/17/2018 at 1:20 AM, IanD said:

Cap, I love this one!

I really like the beautiful simplicity of the piece. Dare I say that the vocal line feels a little more melodic than usual and this is a really attractive aspect of the song. I love the way you introduce the keys and, again, their subtle beautiful simplicity. 

They do say that sometimes "less is more" and I think you really proved it with this piece... superb!

Ian

Thanks as alway, Ian!

[gotto]

Yea man! Very nice. The melody lines of the verses are very hum-along-able, which I feel is an important aspect of listener appeal. Simplicity can be a compelling aspect of music and the keys here offer the baseline for the sweet acoustic riffs. The lyrics ring clear,  the message is strong and the voice is very nice for this piece. I like it. 

Greg

[Jim26]

Great music and singing CapM. Well done.

 

Jim